Still the problems of word play/hiding stuff.
The taking the 23 million from the resource pool is no different to the real situation of reducing the initial allocation to the resource pool. The repay is logically never part of a resource pool.
The real situation is there is the ~10.5% of 2^32 MAID in existence and as the dogmatic view is to do a 1:1 exchange for all the MAID (every MAID is the same as every other MAID), not a first come first serve on some and then smoke and mirrors the rest comes from an improper source of the resource pool. Its not financially sound.
Also the wording of first come first serve is always associated with not giving to all but only those who get in first. This is also a lie since the promise has always been everyone gets 1:1 exchange of MAID for SNT and the wording tells people that is not the case.
The truth and sound way of saying it is to say that all MAID holders will get the 1:1 exchange.
I.E.
An allocation of 452,552,412 SNT will be exchanged with MaidSafeCoin tokens. Tokens will be distributed to MaidSafeCoin holders in the form of an airdrop, with each MaidSafeCoin entitling the bearer to one SNT.
This represents the MAID holdings existing. This is 10.5368% of the total supply^ [explain in a foot note why 10.5368%]
And
Out of the Genesis Supply, 621,189,411 (14.4632% total supply^) SNT will be allocated to a Network Royalty Pool and distributed as Network Royalties.
Your wording is doggy smoke and mirrors whose purpose seems to be trying to keep wording the same as the white paper. In other words lying about the overminting and then using an invalid method of stealing from resource pool without telling the truth that you reduced the initial resource pool by the ~0.5%
If you persist in your wording then there is no way I can support a misleading RFC designed to hide the truth with smoke and mirrors, And such words will not get past any regulatory body (as far as I can tell)
Fix that first.